"Maddie begins the sequence, the tingles start in my fingers and my heart beats faster, you got it this time Maddie!"
There is so much beautiful description in this essay! Beautiful description and sensory details! I especially love this line because of the tingling fingers. I know that feeling--it's breathless, excited, full-on support for the performer (equestrian or otherwise). Holding your breath makes your fingertips tingle. Just this detail shows good characterization for the narrator--she's into this enough to really care, to really cheer, to hold her breath. I love it. The only thing I wasn't sure about in this essay was all of the seemingly unnecessary introductory dialogue. Maddie's mom introduces the narrator to a ton of people, each time echoing the same language. Maybe Beth was using this as a technique to illustrate how new and unsure she was in this environment, but I'm not sure it's needed. Overall though, I loved reading this essay. Beautiful language!
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