"It looks like the sun has exploded. Nothing but white everywhere."
This is a beautiful description of snow. I like how Tara went with the brightness of snow (which, I'm sure was her first impression) rather than the whole "fluffy" image. I really like this language, but I think the image is not quite right. The image that popped into my mind when I read this line was golden sunlight, but seeing as it's nighttime, I think the imagery should be blue-er if I can say that. What about saying, "It looks like the moon has exploded"? That would be just as powerful, and it would also give it a dreamier feel.
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